Tuesday, 18 January 2011

haiku

Sun is falling down
But promise to rise again
See you tommorrow.

Waters moving on
Hurrily follow the others
Going down and down.

Stepping Grassy field
Recieving the cool breeze
Wacthing various clouds.

Opening the book
Reading ordinary text
thinking many things.

Time to go to bed
As you fluff pillows and spread blankets
You would close your eye.

3 comments:

  1. There's little mistakes in syllable
    but nice Haiku

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  2. The second, third and the last one, in the middle, the syllables are more or less than 7. I like your expressions in the poem though.

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  3. You need to work on....
    1 your syllables in your words

    what is good...
    1 Your way of discribing in you haiku
    2 nice fallowing the line rule

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